TWCSW Feb. Lord, I Come

[Wannabe a Worshiper]

Here are the words I have written for this project. I am looking for a collaborator.

The words capture the essence of the entire psalm. The verses I drew from specifically are Psalm 31:1,2,4,16,19,20,22,23

The finished version, and the chord chart are on posts 21 and 22. Scroll down to find them And please post your feedback. Tom

LORD, I COME
words by Tom Kline

1.
O Lord, I come to you for protection
You are the One who rescues me
And when I follow your direction
You deliver me from the enemy

Chorus
Your goodness is so great!
Your love is never-failing
You store up great blessings
For those who honor you

2.
You hide me in your holy presence
You shield me from my enemy
So let your face shine on your servant
And in your love, come set me free

Bridge
Bend down and listen
Rescue me quickly
Be my rock of safety
A fortress from the enemy

Tag
Praise the Lord
Love the Lord
Praise the Lord
Love the Lord

FEEDBACK, PLEASE

[pian0dude]

Do you have a general preference on tempo/feel of this?

-Brian

[Wannabe a Worshiper]

Brian, thanks for your interest. To me this is a medium-paced song. More mellow than heavy, if that makes sense. Just do what you feel led to do. If God gave me the words, and he gives you the music, who can argue with that?

I have some music for it in my head, but alas, I don't play the guitar or keyboard, and I'm just learning how to use the garage band on my new mac.

Tom

[david_d_lindner]

Hey tom, good work on cranking this lyric out. My two cents would be, it would be nice to see the title line in there another time or two. Since you didn't use it in the chorus, maybe you could use it to start each verse, and possibly work it in the bridge again too. Take it or leave it.

[Wannabe a Worshiper]

David, thanks for your feedback. As I sing this over in my head, v1 gets repeated after the bridge.
I'll think about your suggestion and see what comes ...

[pian0dude]

Tom,

Here is a base of what came to me in reading your lyrics.

Let me know what you think. If you like it, I might suggest working on the meter of some of the lyrics in verse 2 so that it'd fit comfortably to the flow/feel posted here.

-Brian

[chipshot0701]

after reading your lyrics i feel a waltz beat with strings in the background. Yeah, a waltz beat sounds right as i sing the verses.


I have not listened to pianodudes mp3 file yet tho.

Maybe I can tinker with it tonight at home and record something down too.

Its a nice piece better be right? after all its inspired.

[pian0dude]

Originally Posted by pian0dude

Tom,

Here is a base of what came to me in reading your lyrics.

Let me know what you think. If you like it, I might suggest working on the meter of some of the lyrics in verse 2 so that it'd fit comfortably to the flow/feel posted here.

-Brian

Tom, so I modified the lyric slightly in my MP3 sample. Also, the harmonies were a 1 take job, so don't expect anything spectacular ;-)

I also tried to let you hear a place where the "Lord I Come" lyric might fit as one of the other posters mentioned a desire to hear it repeat somewhere in the song.

-Brian

[Wannabe a Worshiper]

Brian, sounds great. I look forward to hearing the whole song!


Here is a rewrite of verse 2:

You hide me in the shelter of your presence
You shield me from my enemy
Let your face shine on your servant
In your awesome love, come and set me free

Also, the tag I put on, "Praise the Lord, love the Lord," although found in the psalm, don't really fit the feel of the song. It might work better to end with some ad-lib of "Lord I come."

See how that works.
Tom

[pian0dude]

Tom,

Will try to work something out over the next day or so with the second verse and bridge.

Do you like the overall feel that I'm going for here?

-Brian