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I'm really thankful for this site, I love music, but I really don't have a place to play right now - so I really value any feedback/pointers etc... Obviously i did a bit too much orchestration, but it's kinda whats in my head. I don't have a title - ideas?
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I tried hard to bring two elements of the Eph passage into this 1) The Prayer part.. and 2) the overwhelming feeling of awe and praise... it might be a little
open our eyes to see the hope (C, C/B A)
the hope that Jesus brings (Dm C G)
give us your spirit, reveal yourself (C E/G# Am7)
as your praises we will sing (Dm C G)
Jesus is God alone (C F G)
the universe is now his throne (Am D)
God raised him from the dead (G Em)
and now he's king of all the earth. (F)
he is all that is of worth.. (G)
We thank you king of all the earth
for loving each of us
in our weakness we need your power
our lives to you we trust.
and so we exalt you Jesus
above every rule and power
both now and forver Jesus!
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I listened to your track today. Dude, I am really digging some of the chord progressions in there. Sounds like it could have potential to be somewhat of a rockin' gospel style tune. I think it's interesting how the beginning sounds like a traditional hymn with electric guitar.
I would say there are some timing issues that could probably be smoothed out a bit. I'd be interested in hearing a recording of it with what wounds like a bunch of effects turned off as parts seem to get somewhat drowned out.
I love the chorus!
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Love the song. Not as crazy about the orchestration at the beginning and end of the song, but that is just me. I think if you go one way or the other, either infuse a little heavier on the strings (violin, cello, etc.) or back off a little it might work better.
I think the lyrics work. Wonder if maybe coming out of the bridge, you change the chorus up like you were talking to Jesus: Jesus you're God alone - The universe is now Your throne - and so on.
As far as a title, to me the last line of the chorus seems to sum up the whole song. Maybe calling it, "Is Of Worth" or "Of Worth", something to that effect.
I loved the C, E/G#, Am7 progression on the third lines of the verses. Very cool (I might steal those. Wait, we're christians here, how about I might borrow those. ). The chorus is got a great feel to it. It reminds me a little of the Queen ballads of the 80's. I always liked that sound. Not sure how well a congregation would be able to sing this, but still a great worship song.
Thanks for sharing this.
@Pian0Dude - yeah, timing/vocals are off - i'm planing on rerecording - i need to figure out how to record vocals better, the effects are covering a multitude of mistakes lol
@webobo - Yeah, i thought a lot about the odd switch of making requests of God, and then also talking about Jesus in the third person. The trinitarian side of me doesn't like doing that. But, it seems that Paul is doing just that in the Eph passage... it seems odd to be praying to God the father about Jesus, but it's an oddity that is found in the passage lol I am rethinking the orchestration - (organ electric intro) I like it because it has a real regal take to is that it really hard to duplicate with modern sounds... but I'm thinking of going more ambient - keep riff melody but maybe used a more distant pad or something instead of the cathedral organ.
Sam , I like it. The chorus stuck in my mind for a while, I like the lead guitar element, and I like the potential in great harmonization. I have a few thoughts, but sometimes I think I can be over critical, so please glean from it as you see fit. :-)
Lyrically, I have a couple toughts:
1. The verse speaks to God and the chorus speaks of God. Was this your intent? If not, I think there needs to be consistency in whether the song sings "to" God or "about God." Jason had a good suggestion on changing the chorus to "Jesus, you're God alone."
2. Depending on how we express scripture, God says in Isaiah 66:1 that "Heaven is my throne, and the earth is my footstool." My thought is that the universe has always been God's throne, shared with Jesus. When you say "the universe is now his throne," it seems the Jesus gained the throne through the resurrection. In Ephesians 1, Paul explains that the power of the resurrection seated Christ at God's right hand. So, I'm simply wondering if that line is biblically accurate. I'm no theologian, so I could be wrong. Just sharing my thoughts.
3. As far as the title, I agree with Jason using "Is of Worth" or "Of Worth" ... or simply call it Worth. :-) It does sum up the song well.
Thank you so much for sharing. I love it when God inspires people to write out of reflection of His glory and grace. Hope this helps a little bit.
Melanie Siewert, Christ's Servant
Great song. When you re-record, could you make the voice on the verses a little louder? The instruments drown out your voice.
I will second the idea about keeping the about God/to God line consistent.
(Although the psalmists frequently switch back and forth.)
Thank you for your contribution.
And I still haven't re-recorded it - I'm still working on tweeking some of the vocals - if you read it again and have more ideas, I'm still really interested :-)
I think if you pull the title from the last line of the chorus it would make more sense to call it "All that is of Worth." It sounded a little awkward to me to just call it "Is of Worth." You could call it "King of All the Earth" since that seems to be a major theme as well. I like that the theme is different from most worship songs I've heard before--it's unique.
I thought the lyrics were great, and the imagery you used you said "the universe is now his throne" is beautiful and accurate. I would have thought the tempo would be a bit faster, that was what I had in mind when I read the lyrics.
Here's a lyrical suggestion...very minor and purely a matter theological context.
Jesus is God alone
the universe is now his throne
God raised him from the dead
and now he's king of all the earth.
he is all that is of worth..
If God is eternal...was, is and always will be, I would look at changing the word "now" as to not time stamp His reign.
You could do something like:
All the universe is His throne
And He is King of all the earth
To try and maintain your phrasing and syllable counts.
All that to say...cool chorus.
In His grip,