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  • We Bring the Praise

    A song I wrote; lend me your eyes and give me feedback on the theology. Feedback is greatly appreciated. It's always my goal to have sound theology in music I write.
    Many thanks!

    Verse 1
    We've come to set aside this time as we gather into this sacred space
    And now we offer up our lives as a response to grace
    So let's glorify and magnify
    Our Maker with all our might

    Chorus
    As we bring the praise to lift You up and bless Your name
    United we come, under the banner of Your love and grace
    And by Your Son's sacrifice, the Holy Spirit redeems our lives
    So we've come to share life and seek Your face in this place
    As we bring the praise

    Verse 2
    It's You alone our hearts desire as we freely come may we freely give
    Stir within us Your steadfast love to more trust
    Finding new strength to live
    So let's raise our voices to lift Him high
    Our great King Adonai

    Bridge
    We bring the praise to lift You up
    The Father, Spirit, Son and all of His ways

    We bring the praise to lift You up
    The Father, Spirit, Son and all of His ways

  • #2
    I like it a lot.

    I would ask you to think about the "direction" of verse 2 and the bridge.

    In verse 1, the lyrics are directed to one another. In the chorus, they are directed to God.

    Then in verse 2, the lyrics start out directed to God, but then shift back to us. Shifting direction from one verse to another is fine. Shifting in the middle of the verse confuses me (maybe I am the only one confused -- that has been said before!!). And then the same thing happens in the bridge. So what about:

    Verse 2
    It's You alone our hearts desire as we freely come may we freely give
    Stir within us Your steadfast love to more trust
    Finding new strength to live
    So WE raise our voices to lift YOU high
    Our great King Adonai

    Bridge
    We bring the praise to lift You up
    XXX Father, Spirit, Son and all of YOUR ways

    I'm not sure what word I would suggest for XXX. Maybe "Our", maybe "Oh". Maybe nothing at all.

    That's my two cents worth. Let me know if you want a refund.

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    • #3
      Kepmek,

      I totally agree and see your points with the verse and bridge. I've been away from the forums a while; doesn't seem as active as I remember. Thanks for taking the time to respond!

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