Hello fellow believers...

[AirRobin]

I'm new to this forum. I live in Alberta, Canada. The reason I am here is to get objective, unbiased feedback from people who don't know me and probably won't meet me this side of heaven, who therefore can be honest and encouraging (hopefully).

I have written many songs. Most are mediocre, some are really good so I am told. I am posting my song Someday to this thread in the hopes that some of you will listen and give me some feedback. I am thinking about entering it into a contest next month with the Gospel Music Assoc' of Canada.

Keep in mind that this was done on Garage Band, with not great mic's for vocals, and no live drums (just a track). It needs better mixing/mastering etc. It needs better lead vocals (not my gift). What I really want to know is does it grab you, make you want to sing along, does it stick in your mind? Should I go further with it?

[Smitty]

I really like the guitar in the song, and the chord progression is cool. The "rain and thunder" is good at the beginning of the song, but needs to be taken out of the rest of it. I don't like the hesitation before the start of the chorus, it just kinda feels wrong.

If I were singing it, I think I'd do it just a tad slower, and sing a little more..rather than the power shout thing.

Its a good song, man. Work it a little more.

Smitty

[AirRobin]

Thanks for that feed back! In the original mix we had sung the word "Someday" pre-chorus. When you had mentioned that pause I decided to put it back in. The thunder rain is very mixed. 1/2 the listeners like it throughout, 1/4 like it intro/ending, and some don't like it. I will leave it intro and ending I think. My voice was very hoarse the day we recorded it. Couple that with the fact that I am not a great vocalist and you get what you heard! LOL. As for tempo I really want to keep the intensity of the song. Real drums would help immensely with that.